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Shiva, the Ice Goddess

Post by NMH on Sun Feb 12, 2017 2:15 pm

Name ;; Shiva, the Ice Elemental
Rank ;; SS
Personality ;; Shiva is incredibly friendly towards Satsuki. She particularly despises men as she doesn't want them to "take Satsuki away from her." She usually hides within Satsuki's clothing as her speed, strength, and durability are at a complete 0. Other than her immense chakra, she is completely ordinary.
Element ;; Ice
Species ;; Faerie/Familiar
Description ;; Shiva is a natively 9" ice elemental that takes on the humanoid shape of a woman. Her skin and extravagantly long hair are both an icy-blue color. She has gold rings that hold her hair together, as well as a floating circlet behind her head. Shiva can manipulate her shape and size up to a maximum of 4 feet, though this has no impact on her abilities.
Spoiler:
Durability ;; 20
Speed ;; 10
Strength ;; 0
Chakra ;; 390 (+80 = 470) (+80 = 550)

Special Characteristics ;;
Spoiler:

Name: Transcendental
Rank: S-rank
Type: Spiritual
Description: Shiva's ice techniques are arguably the strongest in the entire summons' plane of existence. Her ice techniques are incredibly powerful and receive a +2 buff to power and speed.

Name: Godlike Spiritual Force
Rank: S
Type: Spiritual
Requirements:: Replaces Insane Spiritual Force
Description: The user has trained their chakra circulatory system extensively, and is now able to mould their chakra to greater effect, producing more powerful jutsu than the average shinobi. They are able to expend chakra faster and with more force than the average shinobi. The power of their jutsu is nearly unrivaled, with even the most basic of techniques able to create a swath of destruction in their wake. The user gains +80 Chakra.

Name: Elemental Perfection (Power)
Rank: S
Type: Spiritual
Requirements:: Replaces Elemental Mastery
Description: The user has trained extensively with their primary element, unlocking its secrets and meditating on its mysteries. They have developed a much deeper connection with their primary element, on both a physical and spiritual level. When selecting this SC, the user chooses Speed or Power. All S-Rank and lower jutsu of the user’s primary element gain +1 to the chosen stat when performed. Additionally, the WC required to train S-Rank or lower jutsu of their primary element is reduced by 25%.

Name: Godlike Spiritual Stamina
Rank: S
Type: Spiritual
Requirements:: Replaces Insane Spiritual Stamina
Description: Through extensive conditioning and countless hours of practice, the user has built up a level of spiritual stamina far greater than the average shinobi. Their chakra reserves are greater than most other shinobi of their rank, allowing them to fight longer before feeling the strain of battle. The user gains +80 Chakra.
Current Contractor ;; Satsuki Kiryuin
Jutsu ;;



Name ;; Ultimate Defense
Rank ;; SS
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; Ice
Range ;; Up to 100 meters
Power ;; --
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; 7 post cooldown
Description ;; The user slams their hand on the ground and creates a massive box of ice with the user (and their team) within it. This block of ice is incredibly durable, capable of neutralizing virtually any attack. The user cannot attack while this jutsu is upheld and those inside of the defense cannot attack either. This impenetrable defense can be upheld for a maximum of four posts but can be canceled earlier.
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract



Name ;; Diamond Dust
Rank ;; S
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; Ice
Range ;; 50 meters
Power ;; 5
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; 6 posts
Description ;; The user calls upon a monstrous blizzard capable of freezing and damaging even the most resilient of foes. If the opponent faces an Incomparable Advantage, their entire being is frozen over, rendering them completely immobile. If the opponent faces a Massive Advantage, their speed is halved for 3 posts, they are unable to utilize hand signs, and they face absolutely traumatic damage. Everything else calculates as normal for the other advantages.
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract




Name ;; Shiva's Kiss
Rank ;; S
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; Ice
Range ;; Self (or friendly target)
Power ;; 5
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; 4 posts after its evaporation
Description ;; Shiva creates an armor of ice with the snap of a finger for Satsuki or a friendly target. The armor's durability is equal to Shiva's chakra and lasts for 6 posts before melting away. The durability this provides stacks on top of any durability received from pre-existing armor.
Spoiler:
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract




Name ;; Gathering of Energy
Rank ;; S
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; n/a
Range ;; Self
Power ;; 5
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; Depends on duration.
Description ;; Shiva begins gathering natural energy for Satsuki. As long as she remains in physical contact with Satsuki, she can transfer the nature energy onto her. Shiva cannot perform any actions other than this while she performs the technique. The cooldown of this technique is determined by the number of posts spent gathering energy. The total amount of posts spent gathering energy can carry over (i.e, if Shiva spends 4 posts gathering nature energy, those 4 posts can be used to sustain 2 total Perfect Sage Mode transformations). Shiva can continue gathering energy while Satsuki is in Sage Mode to extend its duration. If this technique is canceled via forceful removal of contact between Shiva and Satsuki while Shiva is gathering energy, Shiva is automatically un-summoned.
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract


Passives ;;
Spoiler:

Speech: Shiva has the ability to speak and communicate with humans.
Flight:: Shiva can fly.
Sizing: Shiva can manipulate her size between 9" and 4 feet.

Sage Mode ;;

Spoiler:


Summoning Contract ;; Shiva
Primary Stat Increase ;; Speed
Secondary Stat Increase ;; Strength
First Basic SC ;;
Spoiler:
Name: Shiva's Embrace
Rank: S
Type: Physical
Requirements: Shiva Sage Mode
Description: The power of the user's Genjutsu is increased by +2 power and grip through the innate illusionary powers of faeries.
Second Basic SC ;;
Spoiler:
Name: Supersonic Flight
Rank: S
Type: Physical
Requirements: Shiva Sage Mode
Description: The user sprouts wings made of the same ice as Shiva's ice. The user gains the ability to fly. The flight speed is equivalent to Satsuki's speed stat.
Mastered SC ;;  
Spoiler:
Name: Shiva's Blessing
Rank: S
Type: Physical
Requirements: Shiva Sage Mode
Description: Similar to Naruto's Sage Mode, the user gains the ability to amplify the range of their attacks with an invisible "wave" of energy that extends from their body. Satsuki has the unique ability to extend this energy not only from her body, but from any weapons she is holding. The energy strikes with a power equivalent to Satsuki's chakra. The speed remains dependent on her own speed and all of her attacks receive a buff in range 1.5 feet in each direction from the would-be point of contact (i.e: 1.5 feet from her knuckles when she punches).
Name of Sage Summon ;; Shiva
Other Information ;; n/a
Additional Requirements ;; n/a


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Re: Shiva, the Ice Goddess

Post by Kenshin on Tue Feb 21, 2017 11:27 pm

NMH wrote:Name ;; Shiva, the Ice Elemental
Rank ;; SS
Personality ;; Shiva is incredibly friendly towards Satsuki. She particularly despises men as she doesn't want them to "take Satsuki away from her." She usually hides within Satsuki's clothing as her speed, strength, and durability are at a complete 0. Other than her immense chakra, she is completely ordinary.

Please keep in mind that she cannot be with you at all times, you will have to summon her each and every time you wish to use her

Element ;; Ice
Species ;; Faerie/Familiar
Description ;; Shiva is a natively 9" ice elemental that takes on the humanoid shape of a woman. Her skin and extravagantly long hair are both an icy-blue color. She has gold rings that hold her hair together, as well as a floating circlet behind her head. Shiva can manipulate her shape and size up to a maximum of 4 feet, though this has no impact on her abilities.
Spoiler:
Durability ;; 0
Speed ;; 0
Strength ;; 0
Chakra ;; 420 (+80 = 500) (+80 = 580)

There's nothing wrong with your summons stats, you can have them like this if you want, but please keep in mind that having the stats this way would basically result in your summon being able to be killed by a strong gust of wind, not to mention the whole no speed thing. Once again I am not saying you can't keep them this way, but just keep these things in mind

Special Characteristics ;;
Spoiler:

Name: Transcendental
Rank: S-rank
Type: Spiritual
Description: Shiva's ice techniques are arguably the strongest in the entire summons' plane of existence. Her ice takes on a diamond-like quality of durability and strength. Her ice cannot be melted by flames and her ice-techniques function with a power/speed equal to +80 of her base chakra stat.

Please remove the whole 'can't be melted by flames' thing, I cannot in good conscience approve something that basically gives your summons techniques complete immunity to a whole element. The whole 'diamond-like durability and strength' thing is also questionable, because there is no set durability/strength for diamond on this site, soooo yeah, maybe just say that it is more durable than regular Ice.

Name: Godlike Spiritual Force
Rank: S
Type: Spiritual
Requirements:: Replaces Insane Spiritual Force
Description: The user has trained their chakra circulatory system extensively, and is now able to mould their chakra to greater effect, producing more powerful jutsu than the average shinobi. They are able to expend chakra faster and with more force than the average shinobi. The power of their jutsu is nearly unrivaled, with even the most basic of techniques able to create a swath of destruction in their wake. The user gains +80 Chakra.

Name: Elemental Perfection (Power)
Rank: S
Type: Spiritual
Requirements:: Replaces Elemental Mastery
Description: The user has trained extensively with their primary element, unlocking its secrets and meditating on its mysteries. They have developed a much deeper connection with their primary element, on both a physical and spiritual level. When selecting this SC, the user chooses Speed or Power. All S-Rank and lower jutsu of the user’s primary element gain +1 to the chosen stat when performed. Additionally, the WC required to train S-Rank or lower jutsu of their primary element is reduced by 25%.

Name: Godlike Spiritual Stamina
Rank: S
Type: Spiritual
Requirements:: Replaces Insane Spiritual Stamina
Description: Through extensive conditioning and countless hours of practice, the user has built up a level of spiritual stamina far greater than the average shinobi. Their chakra reserves are greater than most other shinobi of their rank, allowing them to fight longer before feeling the strain of battle. The user gains +80 Chakra.
Current Contractor ;; Satsuki Kiryuin
Jutsu ;;



Name ;; Ultimate Defense
Rank ;; SS
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; Ice
Range ;; Up to 100 meters
Power ;; 6
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; Depends on duration upheld.
Description ;; The user slams their hand on the ground and creates a massive box of ice with the user (and their team) within it. This block of ice is incredibly durable, capable of neutralizing virtually any attack. The only way to destroy/penetrate the block of ice is by attacking it with a focused attack greater in power than two-times more than that of the user's chakra stat for two entire posts, otherwise it remains in perfect condition. The user cannot attack while this jutsu is upheld and those inside of the defense cannot attack either. This impenetrable defense can be upheld for a maximum of four posts but can be canceled earlier. The cooldown of this technique is equal to the duration it was upheld +2 posts.
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract

SS-rank jutsu have 5 in one stat and - in the other, - means that is N/A, because it's power/speed cannot be defined, so please fix up your numbers. Also, please get rid of this 'The only way to destroy/penetrate the block of ice is by attacking it with a focused attack greater in power than two-times more than that of the user's chakra stat for two entire posts, otherwise it remains in perfect condition'. SS-rank barrier style techniques with - in power can only really be damaged/destroyed by other SS-rank techniques with - in power, as it's basically an unbreakable wall being hit by an unstoppable technique, they basically cancel each other out.



Name ;; Diamond Dust
Rank ;; S
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; Ice
Range ;; 50 meters
Power ;; 5
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; 15 posts
Description ;; The user calls upon a monstrous blizzard capable of freezing and damaging even the most resilient of foes. If the opponent faces a Massive Advantage or greater, their entire being is frozen over, rendering them completely immobile. If the opponent faces a Heavy Advantage, their speed is halved for 3 posts and if they face absolutely traumatic damage. Everything else calculates as normal for the other advantages.
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract


I would say being completely frozen should require an Incomparable Advantage, the speed halved thing can be at Massive Advantage due to hypothermia or something (you could also add in something like due to their bodies shivering so badly they cannot form hand seals ^_^), everything else looks to be fine (the cool down could be reduced down to...hmm, lets say 6 posts)



Name ;; Shiva's Kiss
Rank ;; S
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; Ice
Range ;; Self (or friendly target)
Power ;; 5
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; 4 posts after its evaporation
Description ;; Shiva creates an armor of ice with the snap of a finger for Satsuki or a friendly target. The armor's durability is equal to Shiva's chakra and lasts for 6 posts before melting away. The durability this provides stacks on top of any durability received from pre-existing armor.
Spoiler:
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract


Approved



Name ;; Gathering of Energy
Rank ;; S
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; n/a
Range ;; Self
Power ;; 5
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; Depends on duration.
Description ;; Shiva begins gathering natural energy for Satsuki. As long as she remains in physical contact with Satsuki, she can transfer the nature energy onto her. Shiva cannot perform any actions other than this while she performs the technique. The cooldown of this technique is determined by the number of posts spent gathering energy. The total amount of posts spent gathering energy can carry over (i.e, if Shiva spends 4 posts gathering nature energy, those 4 posts can be used to sustain 2 total Perfect Sage Mode transformations). Shiva can continue gathering energy while Satsuki is in Sage Mode to extend its duration. If this technique is canceled via forceful removal of contact between Shiva and Satsuki while Shiva is gathering energy, Shiva is automatically un-summoned.
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract


Approved

Passives ;;
Spoiler:

Speech: Shiva has the ability to speak and communicate with humans.
Flight:: Shiva can fly.

I don't really see how she has the passive ability to fly with a speed stat at 0...Passives usually don't work off chakra, since ya know, chakra being used generally means it ain't passive

Sizing: Shiva can manipulate her size between 9" and 4 feet.

Sage Mode ;;

Spoiler:


Summoning Contract ;; Shiva
Primary Stat Increase ;; Speed
Secondary Stat Increase ;; Strength
First Basic SC ;;
Spoiler:
Name: Shiva's Touch
Rank: S
Type: Physical
Requirements: Shiva Sage Mode
Description: When in Sage Mode, 6 blades of ice are formed around Satsuki. These blades float in midair and can be controller via Satsuki's chakra. The strength and speed of these swords are equal to Satsuki's chakra stat.

This is not a SC, this is more of a custom jutsu

Second Basic SC ;;
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Name: Supersonic Flight
Rank: S
Type: Physical
Requirements: Shiva Sage Mode
Description: The user gains the ability to fly. The flight speed is equivalent to Satsuki's speed stat.

Please explain HOW the user gains the ability to fly

Mastered SC ;;  
Spoiler:
Name: Oathkeeper
Rank: S
Type: Physical
Requirements: Shiva Sage Mode
Description: A blade made of Shiva's ice forms in the hand of Satsuki for the duration of Sage Mode. The blade is approximately 44" long and is icy-blue. The sword's speed and strength is determined by two times Satsuki's strength and speed state when wielding a blade. The blade melts away if Satsuki leaves Sage Mode.

Like the first SC this is not a SC, this is more of a custom jutsu

Name of Sage Summon ;; Shiva
Other Information ;; n/a
Additional Requirements ;; n/a

Once these edits have been made please either bump this or PM me and I will look over it again, also, if you have any questions please feel free to PM me
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Re: Shiva, the Ice Goddess

Post by NMH on Wed Feb 22, 2017 9:50 pm

BUMP w/ EDITS ACROSS THE BOARD
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Re: Shiva, the Ice Goddess

Post by シャーク女神干柿 on Thu Feb 23, 2017 8:22 am

I've been informed that more changes need to be made. Second-look your edits and what is requested.
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Re: Shiva, the Ice Goddess

Post by NMH on Thu Feb 23, 2017 8:28 am

Edited. Sorry for the mix-up
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Re: Shiva, the Ice Goddess

Post by Kenshin on Thu Feb 23, 2017 9:25 am

NMH wrote:Name ;; Shiva, the Ice Elemental
Rank ;; SS
Personality ;; Shiva is incredibly friendly towards Satsuki. She particularly despises men as she doesn't want them to "take Satsuki away from her." She usually hides within Satsuki's clothing as her speed, strength, and durability are at a complete 0. Other than her immense chakra, she is completely ordinary.
Element ;; Ice
Species ;; Faerie/Familiar
Description ;; Shiva is a natively 9" ice elemental that takes on the humanoid shape of a woman. Her skin and extravagantly long hair are both an icy-blue color. She has gold rings that hold her hair together, as well as a floating circlet behind her head. Shiva can manipulate her shape and size up to a maximum of 4 feet, though this has no impact on her abilities.
Spoiler:
Durability ;; 20
Speed ;; 10
Strength ;; 0
Chakra ;; 390 (+80 = 470) (+80 = 550)

Special Characteristics ;;
Spoiler:

Name: Transcendental
Rank: S-rank
Type: Spiritual
Description: Shiva's ice techniques are arguably the strongest in the entire summons' plane of existence. Her ice takes on a diamond-like quality of durability and strength. Her ice cannot be melted by flames and her ice-techniques function with a power/speed equal to +2 power and speed of the ice jutsu.

"Please remove the whole 'can't be melted by flames' thing, I cannot in good conscience approve something that basically gives your summons techniques complete immunity to a whole element. The whole 'diamond-like durability and strength' thing is also questionable, because there is no set durability/strength for diamond on this site, soooo yeah, maybe just say that it is more durable than regular Ice."

That was in my first post, so yeah, please remove the immunity to fire and the diamond like quality thing


Name: Godlike Spiritual Force
Rank: S
Type: Spiritual
Requirements:: Replaces Insane Spiritual Force
Description: The user has trained their chakra circulatory system extensively, and is now able to mould their chakra to greater effect, producing more powerful jutsu than the average shinobi. They are able to expend chakra faster and with more force than the average shinobi. The power of their jutsu is nearly unrivaled, with even the most basic of techniques able to create a swath of destruction in their wake. The user gains +80 Chakra.

Name: Elemental Perfection (Power)
Rank: S
Type: Spiritual
Requirements:: Replaces Elemental Mastery
Description: The user has trained extensively with their primary element, unlocking its secrets and meditating on its mysteries. They have developed a much deeper connection with their primary element, on both a physical and spiritual level. When selecting this SC, the user chooses Speed or Power. All S-Rank and lower jutsu of the user’s primary element gain +1 to the chosen stat when performed. Additionally, the WC required to train S-Rank or lower jutsu of their primary element is reduced by 25%.

Name: Godlike Spiritual Stamina
Rank: S
Type: Spiritual
Requirements:: Replaces Insane Spiritual Stamina
Description: Through extensive conditioning and countless hours of practice, the user has built up a level of spiritual stamina far greater than the average shinobi. Their chakra reserves are greater than most other shinobi of their rank, allowing them to fight longer before feeling the strain of battle. The user gains +80 Chakra.
Current Contractor ;; Satsuki Kiryuin
Jutsu ;;



Name ;; Ultimate Defense
Rank ;; SS
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; Ice
Range ;; Up to 100 meters
Power ;; --
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; Depends on duration upheld.
Description ;; The user slams their hand on the ground and creates a massive box of ice with the user (and their team) within it. This block of ice is incredibly durable, capable of neutralizing virtually any attack. The user cannot attack while this jutsu is upheld and those inside of the defense cannot attack either. This impenetrable defense can be upheld for a maximum of four posts but can be canceled earlier. The cooldown of this technique is equal to the duration it was upheld +2 posts.
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract

One problem, I don't really like how you can basically form this nigh unbreakable wall once every 3 posts (considering all you would have to do is form it to block a jutsu, then let it fall, and be able to use it 2 posts later) just simplify it a bit and make it a solid 7 post cool down regardless of how long it is held, as it is a nigh unbreakable barrier that you can hold up for 4 consecutive posts



Name ;; Diamond Dust
Rank ;; S
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; Ice
Range ;; 50 meters
Power ;; 5
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; 6 posts
Description ;; The user calls upon a monstrous blizzard capable of freezing and damaging even the most resilient of foes. If the opponent faces an Incomparable Advantage, their entire being is frozen over, rendering them completely immobile. If the opponent faces a Massive Advantage, their speed is halved for 3 posts, they are unable to utilize hand signs, and they face absolutely traumatic damage. Everything else calculates as normal for the other advantages.
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract


Looks good now, approved



Name ;; Shiva's Kiss
Rank ;; S
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; Ice
Range ;; Self (or friendly target)
Power ;; 5
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; 4 posts after its evaporation
Description ;; Shiva creates an armor of ice with the snap of a finger for Satsuki or a friendly target. The armor's durability is equal to Shiva's chakra and lasts for 6 posts before melting away. The durability this provides stacks on top of any durability received from pre-existing armor.
Spoiler:
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract




Name ;; Gathering of Energy
Rank ;; S
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; n/a
Range ;; Self
Power ;; 5
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; Depends on duration.
Description ;; Shiva begins gathering natural energy for Satsuki. As long as she remains in physical contact with Satsuki, she can transfer the nature energy onto her. Shiva cannot perform any actions other than this while she performs the technique. The cooldown of this technique is determined by the number of posts spent gathering energy. The total amount of posts spent gathering energy can carry over (i.e, if Shiva spends 4 posts gathering nature energy, those 4 posts can be used to sustain 2 total Perfect Sage Mode transformations). Shiva can continue gathering energy while Satsuki is in Sage Mode to extend its duration. If this technique is canceled via forceful removal of contact between Shiva and Satsuki while Shiva is gathering energy, Shiva is automatically un-summoned.
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract


Passives ;;
Spoiler:

Speech: Shiva has the ability to speak and communicate with humans.
Flight:: Shiva can fly.
Sizing: Shiva can manipulate her size between 9" and 4 feet.

Sage Mode ;;

Spoiler:


Summoning Contract ;; Shiva
Primary Stat Increase ;; Speed
Secondary Stat Increase ;; Strength
First Basic SC ;;
Spoiler:
Name: Shiva's Embrace
Rank: S
Type: Physical
Requirements: Shiva Sage Mode
Description: Once the user enters Sage Mode, their entire body gets coated in an intricate armor made of Shiva's ice. The armor is painfully cold to the touch and freezes anything Satsuki wishes it to upon physical contact. The strength and speed at which the freeze spreads is equivalent to Satsuki's chakra stat. The armor's durability is equal to two times Satsuki's chakra stat and remains until the user exits Sage Mode.

Once again this is more of a jutsu than a Special Characteristic, remember, a special characteristic is just that, a characteristic that your character has that sets them apart from others, an armour of ice is not that.
Second Basic SC ;;
Spoiler:
Name: Supersonic Flight
Rank: S
Type: Physical
Requirements: Shiva Sage Mode
Description: The user sprouts wings made of the same ice as Shiva's ice. The user gains the ability to fly. The flight speed is equivalent to Satsuki's speed stat.

This really seems like more of a jutsu, a set of Ice Wings being created is not really a characteristic. Think of something passive, that sets Satsuki in Sage Mode apart from others, maybe she gains a unique fighting style (like Naruto's in Canon), just remember, it must be passive.

Mastered SC ;;  
Spoiler:
Name: Shiva's Blessing
Rank: S
Type: Physical
Requirements: Shiva Sage Mode
Description: The user gains the ability to utilize ice jutsu, including Shiva's jutsu. All ice jutsu the user uses take on the Transcendental property of Shiva.

Now this I am afraid I cannot allow, I can't give you a special characteristic that not only gives you access to an advanced element that you do not possess, but also gives you an additional SC that powers said element up by a significant degree.
Name of Sage Summon ;; Shiva
Other Information ;; n/a
Additional Requirements ;; n/a

Round 2, once again let me know once these things have been edited either via a bump or a PM, also once again please PM me if you have any questions. (Although I am about to head to sleep for the night)
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Re: Shiva, the Ice Goddess

Post by NMH on Thu Feb 23, 2017 1:28 pm

I disagree on the Wings and the Ice Armor SCs. If you look at the canon Narutoverse, Kabuto's transformation gave him physical changes that gave him advantages, such as a tail, brille for his eyes, and scales that provided a layer of armor. Physical changes that provide advantages are definitely part of Sage Mode. Instead, I'll change the wording from armor to a natural process her body undergoes.

Made edits to everything else requested as well as completely altering the Mastered SC of Sage Mode
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Re: Shiva, the Ice Goddess

Post by Kenshin on Thu Feb 23, 2017 7:51 pm

I mean, you may disagree but I am afraid that doesn't change that the armour is more of a jutsu, I can relent on the Ice Wings since they can be seen as passive, but I cannot relent on the armour. Also, for your examples, Kabuto never possessed a tail, he had the navel-snake, which came from assimilating Sakon/Ukon's DNA, as for the Brille, well it was shown to grow only after he formed the hand seals for Sage Art: White Rage, so I mean, it could easily be argued that it is part of that technique. Now onto his scales...they were never used as an armour, it was simply cosmetic as a result of absorbing Orochimaru's power.

But regardless I am not here to argue semantics, I am here to grade your app. Now as I was saying, I cannot allow you to possess an armour of Ice that has a durability of 2x your chakra stat as a SC, what you need to realize is that such a thing far surpasses an S-rank jutsu, as an S-rank jutsu generally has 5 in power, and 5 power means that the power of the technique IS your chakra stat...how is it fair for you to have an armour 2x stronger than that, along with the ability to freeze anything on contact, as a SC? The answer, it isn't, it's simply not fair, because not only is the ability far beyond any and all S-rank SC's on the site, but it simply does not follow the rules for a SC, because it is not, it is a jutsu.

Feel free to get a second opinion if you still disagree
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Re: Shiva, the Ice Goddess

Post by NMH on Thu Feb 23, 2017 8:15 pm

Okay, it's one thing to judge it's strength and another to say it isn't an SC even after it was reworded as a physical change in the user's body due to them entering Sage Mode. Kinda sounds like you're moving the goalpost, but I digress. It'll get changed.


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Re: Shiva, the Ice Goddess

Post by NMH on Thu Feb 23, 2017 8:28 pm

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Re: Shiva, the Ice Goddess

Post by Kenshin on Thu Feb 23, 2017 8:35 pm

NMH wrote:Name ;; Shiva, the Ice Elemental
Rank ;; SS
Personality ;; Shiva is incredibly friendly towards Satsuki. She particularly despises men as she doesn't want them to "take Satsuki away from her." She usually hides within Satsuki's clothing as her speed, strength, and durability are at a complete 0. Other than her immense chakra, she is completely ordinary.
Element ;; Ice
Species ;; Faerie/Familiar
Description ;; Shiva is a natively 9" ice elemental that takes on the humanoid shape of a woman. Her skin and extravagantly long hair are both an icy-blue color. She has gold rings that hold her hair together, as well as a floating circlet behind her head. Shiva can manipulate her shape and size up to a maximum of 4 feet, though this has no impact on her abilities.
Spoiler:
Durability ;; 20
Speed ;; 10
Strength ;; 0
Chakra ;; 390 (+80 = 470) (+80 = 550)

Special Characteristics ;;
Spoiler:

Name: Transcendental
Rank: S-rank
Type: Spiritual
Description: Shiva's ice techniques are arguably the strongest in the entire summons' plane of existence. Her ice techniques are incredibly powerful and receive a +2 buff to power and speed.

Approved

Name: Godlike Spiritual Force
Rank: S
Type: Spiritual
Requirements:: Replaces Insane Spiritual Force
Description: The user has trained their chakra circulatory system extensively, and is now able to mould their chakra to greater effect, producing more powerful jutsu than the average shinobi. They are able to expend chakra faster and with more force than the average shinobi. The power of their jutsu is nearly unrivaled, with even the most basic of techniques able to create a swath of destruction in their wake. The user gains +80 Chakra.

Name: Elemental Perfection (Power)
Rank: S
Type: Spiritual
Requirements:: Replaces Elemental Mastery
Description: The user has trained extensively with their primary element, unlocking its secrets and meditating on its mysteries. They have developed a much deeper connection with their primary element, on both a physical and spiritual level. When selecting this SC, the user chooses Speed or Power. All S-Rank and lower jutsu of the user’s primary element gain +1 to the chosen stat when performed. Additionally, the WC required to train S-Rank or lower jutsu of their primary element is reduced by 25%.

Name: Godlike Spiritual Stamina
Rank: S
Type: Spiritual
Requirements:: Replaces Insane Spiritual Stamina
Description: Through extensive conditioning and countless hours of practice, the user has built up a level of spiritual stamina far greater than the average shinobi. Their chakra reserves are greater than most other shinobi of their rank, allowing them to fight longer before feeling the strain of battle. The user gains +80 Chakra.
Current Contractor ;; Satsuki Kiryuin
Jutsu ;;



Name ;; Ultimate Defense
Rank ;; SS
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; Ice
Range ;; Up to 100 meters
Power ;; --
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; 7 post cooldown
Description ;; The user slams their hand on the ground and creates a massive box of ice with the user (and their team) within it. This block of ice is incredibly durable, capable of neutralizing virtually any attack. The user cannot attack while this jutsu is upheld and those inside of the defense cannot attack either. This impenetrable defense can be upheld for a maximum of four posts but can be canceled earlier.
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract

Approved



Name ;; Diamond Dust
Rank ;; S
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; Ice
Range ;; 50 meters
Power ;; 5
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; 6 posts
Description ;; The user calls upon a monstrous blizzard capable of freezing and damaging even the most resilient of foes. If the opponent faces an Incomparable Advantage, their entire being is frozen over, rendering them completely immobile. If the opponent faces a Massive Advantage, their speed is halved for 3 posts, they are unable to utilize hand signs, and they face absolutely traumatic damage. Everything else calculates as normal for the other advantages.
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract




Name ;; Shiva's Kiss
Rank ;; S
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; Ice
Range ;; Self (or friendly target)
Power ;; 5
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; 4 posts after its evaporation
Description ;; Shiva creates an armor of ice with the snap of a finger for Satsuki or a friendly target. The armor's durability is equal to Shiva's chakra and lasts for 6 posts before melting away. The durability this provides stacks on top of any durability received from pre-existing armor.
Spoiler:
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract




Name ;; Gathering of Energy
Rank ;; S
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; n/a
Range ;; Self
Power ;; 5
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; Depends on duration.
Description ;; Shiva begins gathering natural energy for Satsuki. As long as she remains in physical contact with Satsuki, she can transfer the nature energy onto her. Shiva cannot perform any actions other than this while she performs the technique. The cooldown of this technique is determined by the number of posts spent gathering energy. The total amount of posts spent gathering energy can carry over (i.e, if Shiva spends 4 posts gathering nature energy, those 4 posts can be used to sustain 2 total Perfect Sage Mode transformations). Shiva can continue gathering energy while Satsuki is in Sage Mode to extend its duration. If this technique is canceled via forceful removal of contact between Shiva and Satsuki while Shiva is gathering energy, Shiva is automatically un-summoned.
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract


Passives ;;
Spoiler:

Speech: Shiva has the ability to speak and communicate with humans.
Flight:: Shiva can fly.
Sizing: Shiva can manipulate her size between 9" and 4 feet.

Sage Mode ;;

Spoiler:


Summoning Contract ;; Shiva
Primary Stat Increase ;; Speed
Secondary Stat Increase ;; Strength
First Basic SC ;;
Spoiler:
Name: Shiva's Embrace
Rank: S
Type: Physical
Requirements: Shiva Sage Mode
Description: The power of the user's Genjutsu is increased by +1 through the innate illusionary powers of faeries.

You could have the boost be +2 power and grip (since it is an S-rank SC(Genjutsu has Grip rather than speed))
Second Basic SC ;;
Spoiler:
Name: Supersonic Flight
Rank: S
Type: Physical
Requirements: Shiva Sage Mode
Description: The user sprouts wings made of the same ice as Shiva's ice. The user gains the ability to fly. The flight speed is equivalent to Satsuki's speed stat.

Approved
Mastered SC ;;  
Spoiler:
Name: Shiva's Blessing
Rank: S
Type: Physical
Requirements: Shiva Sage Mode
Description: Similar to Naruto's Sage Mode, the user gains the ability to amplify the range of their attacks with an invisible "wave" of energy that extends from their body. Satsuki has the unique ability to extend this energy not only from her body, but from any weapons she is holding. The energy strikes with a power equivalent to Satsuki's chakra. The speed remains dependent on her own speed and all of her attacks receive a buff in range 1.5 feet in each direction from the would-be point of contact (i.e: 1.5 feet from her knuckles when she punches).

Approved
Name of Sage Summon ;; Shiva
Other Information ;; n/a
Additional Requirements ;; n/a
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Re: Shiva, the Ice Goddess

Post by NMH on Thu Feb 23, 2017 8:41 pm

Done~

Thank you for your time~~
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Re: Shiva, the Ice Goddess

Post by Kenshin on Thu Feb 23, 2017 8:45 pm

NMH wrote:Name ;; Shiva, the Ice Elemental
Rank ;; SS
Personality ;; Shiva is incredibly friendly towards Satsuki. She particularly despises men as she doesn't want them to "take Satsuki away from her." She usually hides within Satsuki's clothing as her speed, strength, and durability are at a complete 0. Other than her immense chakra, she is completely ordinary.
Element ;; Ice
Species ;; Faerie/Familiar
Description ;; Shiva is a natively 9" ice elemental that takes on the humanoid shape of a woman. Her skin and extravagantly long hair are both an icy-blue color. She has gold rings that hold her hair together, as well as a floating circlet behind her head. Shiva can manipulate her shape and size up to a maximum of 4 feet, though this has no impact on her abilities.
Spoiler:
Durability ;; 20
Speed ;; 10
Strength ;; 0
Chakra ;; 390 (+80 = 470) (+80 = 550)

Special Characteristics ;;
Spoiler:

Name: Transcendental
Rank: S-rank
Type: Spiritual
Description: Shiva's ice techniques are arguably the strongest in the entire summons' plane of existence. Her ice techniques are incredibly powerful and receive a +2 buff to power and speed.

Name: Godlike Spiritual Force
Rank: S
Type: Spiritual
Requirements:: Replaces Insane Spiritual Force
Description: The user has trained their chakra circulatory system extensively, and is now able to mould their chakra to greater effect, producing more powerful jutsu than the average shinobi. They are able to expend chakra faster and with more force than the average shinobi. The power of their jutsu is nearly unrivaled, with even the most basic of techniques able to create a swath of destruction in their wake. The user gains +80 Chakra.

Name: Elemental Perfection (Power)
Rank: S
Type: Spiritual
Requirements:: Replaces Elemental Mastery
Description: The user has trained extensively with their primary element, unlocking its secrets and meditating on its mysteries. They have developed a much deeper connection with their primary element, on both a physical and spiritual level. When selecting this SC, the user chooses Speed or Power. All S-Rank and lower jutsu of the user’s primary element gain +1 to the chosen stat when performed. Additionally, the WC required to train S-Rank or lower jutsu of their primary element is reduced by 25%.

Name: Godlike Spiritual Stamina
Rank: S
Type: Spiritual
Requirements:: Replaces Insane Spiritual Stamina
Description: Through extensive conditioning and countless hours of practice, the user has built up a level of spiritual stamina far greater than the average shinobi. Their chakra reserves are greater than most other shinobi of their rank, allowing them to fight longer before feeling the strain of battle. The user gains +80 Chakra.
Current Contractor ;; Satsuki Kiryuin
Jutsu ;;



Name ;; Ultimate Defense
Rank ;; SS
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; Ice
Range ;; Up to 100 meters
Power ;; --
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; 7 post cooldown
Description ;; The user slams their hand on the ground and creates a massive box of ice with the user (and their team) within it. This block of ice is incredibly durable, capable of neutralizing virtually any attack. The user cannot attack while this jutsu is upheld and those inside of the defense cannot attack either. This impenetrable defense can be upheld for a maximum of four posts but can be canceled earlier.
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract



Name ;; Diamond Dust
Rank ;; S
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; Ice
Range ;; 50 meters
Power ;; 5
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; 6 posts
Description ;; The user calls upon a monstrous blizzard capable of freezing and damaging even the most resilient of foes. If the opponent faces an Incomparable Advantage, their entire being is frozen over, rendering them completely immobile. If the opponent faces a Massive Advantage, their speed is halved for 3 posts, they are unable to utilize hand signs, and they face absolutely traumatic damage. Everything else calculates as normal for the other advantages.
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract




Name ;; Shiva's Kiss
Rank ;; S
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; Ice
Range ;; Self (or friendly target)
Power ;; 5
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; 4 posts after its evaporation
Description ;; Shiva creates an armor of ice with the snap of a finger for Satsuki or a friendly target. The armor's durability is equal to Shiva's chakra and lasts for 6 posts before melting away. The durability this provides stacks on top of any durability received from pre-existing armor.
Spoiler:
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract




Name ;; Gathering of Energy
Rank ;; S
Type ;; Ninjutsu
Element ;; n/a
Range ;; Self
Power ;; 5
Speed ;; 5
Cool Down;; Depends on duration.
Description ;; Shiva begins gathering natural energy for Satsuki. As long as she remains in physical contact with Satsuki, she can transfer the nature energy onto her. Shiva cannot perform any actions other than this while she performs the technique. The cooldown of this technique is determined by the number of posts spent gathering energy. The total amount of posts spent gathering energy can carry over (i.e, if Shiva spends 4 posts gathering nature energy, those 4 posts can be used to sustain 2 total Perfect Sage Mode transformations). Shiva can continue gathering energy while Satsuki is in Sage Mode to extend its duration. If this technique is canceled via forceful removal of contact between Shiva and Satsuki while Shiva is gathering energy, Shiva is automatically un-summoned.
Requirements ;; Shiva Summoning Contract


Passives ;;
Spoiler:

Speech: Shiva has the ability to speak and communicate with humans.
Flight:: Shiva can fly.
Sizing: Shiva can manipulate her size between 9" and 4 feet.

Sage Mode ;;

Spoiler:


Summoning Contract ;; Shiva
Primary Stat Increase ;; Speed
Secondary Stat Increase ;; Strength
First Basic SC ;;
Spoiler:
Name: Shiva's Embrace
Rank: S
Type: Physical
Requirements: Shiva Sage Mode
Description: The power of the user's Genjutsu is increased by +2 power and grip through the innate illusionary powers of faeries.
Second Basic SC ;;
Spoiler:
Name: Supersonic Flight
Rank: S
Type: Physical
Requirements: Shiva Sage Mode
Description: The user sprouts wings made of the same ice as Shiva's ice. The user gains the ability to fly. The flight speed is equivalent to Satsuki's speed stat.
Mastered SC ;;  
Spoiler:
Name: Shiva's Blessing
Rank: S
Type: Physical
Requirements: Shiva Sage Mode
Description: Similar to Naruto's Sage Mode, the user gains the ability to amplify the range of their attacks with an invisible "wave" of energy that extends from their body. Satsuki has the unique ability to extend this energy not only from her body, but from any weapons she is holding. The energy strikes with a power equivalent to Satsuki's chakra. The speed remains dependent on her own speed and all of her attacks receive a buff in range 1.5 feet in each direction from the would-be point of contact (i.e: 1.5 feet from her knuckles when she punches).
Name of Sage Summon ;; Shiva
Other Information ;; n/a
Additional Requirements ;; n/a

Shiva, along with all of her SC's and Jutsu, are approved. Sage Mode SC's are also approved. Happy RPing

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